How To Start An Essay About Someone Who Inspires You

Good evening everyone,

I have just started to write my first essay since high school. It is very intimidating to me because I do not make it a habit to write very often. I have started the journal, and it seems to help a little. I was wondering if you would please take a look at what I have written so far, and answer a few of the questions I have. I will put my questions at the bottom. I am required to write a descriptive essay about someone who has inspired me, and write about one way they have inspired me.


What does someone do to inspire you? To me, inspiration is the process of instilling faith in someone to motivate him or her to do something. Many people do things simply out of the kindness in their heart, and do not realize they are inspiring others around them.

To me, my husband Dave inspires me the most. He is a very loving and caring person. He gives me the strength in my heart to do whatever I put my mind to. He inspires me to do things by example. He inspires me most when I see how his generosity makes other people feel, and how good it makes him feel because of their reaction. From that example, it makes me want to do something so I can experience the same feeling.

Dave always inspires me to make goals for myself, chase my dreams, and to do things to help others. He volunteers whenever he can. A few of his favorites are Cub Scouts, Drug Awareness Programs, Children's Hospitals, Supporting our Veterans, Community Highway Clean-up, and Habitat for Society. He is also very dedicated to helping his country. He has been in the United States Navy for almost 20 years as a Senior Chief Builder in the Seabees. He will retire soon, but his desire to help our country and community will continue.

It was one rainy evening in particular I will never forget. We were sitting in the living room discussing his plans for a motorcycle run to raise money for the Veterans Hospital in Hampton Virginia. The TV was playing in the background, and our son was sitting at the kitchen table working on his homework. In the middle of our conversation, his cell phone rang. He stepped outside to take the call, and I went to check our son's progress with his homework. When he came back into the house, he did not say a word. He just turned the volume on the TV up, and started to watch the coverage for the upcoming hurricane.

He began to explain the phone call he had just received. It was from his boss in the military. He said if the hurricane were going to be as strong as they think it will be, he would have to leave right away to be there for the disaster recovery. This started to make me worry about what was going to happen to the motorcycle run. We had over 200 people already pre-registered, the t-shirts ordered, the food was being prepared, the permits were in hand, and the police escort had already been set up. I knew this was something Dave was passionate about, and it had to go on.

Suddenly, on August 29, Hurricane Katrina hit the Gulf coast. There was severe damage mostly in the cities of Mobile, Alabama, Waveland, Biloxi/Gulfport, Mississippi, and New Orleans. At least 1,836 people lost their lives due to the severe storm surge damage. Dave was ready to go as soon as he heard the news, so he could provide help to those who lost everything.

More than 3,000 U.S. Navy Seabees from all over the United States aided in the hurricane Katrina relief efforts. Hurricane Katrina was so devastating; Dave and his crew volunteered to stay longer, and could not make it back in time for the motorcycle run for the veteran's hospital.

His passion to help his community, and our country inspired me to take over the motorcycle run. I wanted to make a difference in people’s lives just as Dave would have done. He wanted to make life a little easier not only for our veterans in the hospital, but also the people who lost everything due to the hurricane. After a lot of hard work and dedication, it was a very rewarding feeling knowing I could help that day. The motorcycle run was a huge success, and we were able to present them with a check for over five thousand dollars.

Without the inspiration from my husband, and continuing to do things out of the kindness of his heart, I would not have been motivated to do the things I have done. He continues to inspire me to do things everyday, and I would not be the person I am today without him.


1. I am worried about my commas and semi-colon usage. When I listed the things he volunteers for, did I need to use a comma or a semicolon when I said "a few of his favorites are"

2. "He said if the hurricane were going to be as strong as they think it will be, he would have to leave right away to be there for the disaster recovery." Did I use the word were properly?

3. "There was severe damage mostly in the cities of Mobile, Alabama, Waveland, Biloxi/Gulfport, Mississippi, and New Orleans." Did I list the names correctly?

Any and all help would be greatly appreciated. Thank you so much for your time.


Seabee Sweetie

Helpful Instructions On How To Write An Essay About Someone Who Inspires You

I always find that these kind of essays are a joy to write. Rather than being stuck with a topic that you despise you actually get to write about your hero or heroine. In terms of motivation there shouldn’t be any problem in knuckling down to the task ahead. The scope of work calls for you to pick the person yourself, so you are also in a rare situation of not being dictated to by your teacher.

This is your opportunity to shine. However, with that opportunity can sometimes come pressure as students feel the need to do justice to the person that inspires them the most. So, if you are in danger of being a little too awestruck, sit back and relax because I’ve got it covered! Here’re my helpful instructions on how to write an essay about someone who inspires you:

  • Is there enough information to write about them?
  • It is all very well and good having a role model that you look up to. However, before you jump in the deep end and start writing about them you need to seriously consider whether there is enough information about them to make the essay viable. You have several options:

    • The person is known to you
    • The information is readily available on the internet
    • There is easy availability of information in text-books
  • Look for a unique angle
  • If you are writing about someone famous then chances are you won’t be the first person to have chosen to write about them. Be wary of trotting out essays that are too similar to those that have already been written. Try and find a unique angle to cover, for example:

    • Their motivations
    • Their family life (If it is not widely reported)
  • Don’t be sycophantic
  • It is very easy when writing about someone that you admire to sound sycophantic. You can still admire someone and accept that they have flaws. Everyone is human. Your teacher will be inundated with hero-worship essays, make sure that you portray your subject for the person that they really are rather than the one that their fans always see.

  • Why do they inspire you?
  • This is an obvious one to overlook but whatever you do, make sure that you remember to include the reasons why they inspire you. It is very easy to simply write a bio about the person without addressing the original scope of work.

    Good luck!

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